Tutor’s feedback on my Assignment 2_People unaware

Tutor report

Student name Theodora Grivopoulou Student number 512340
Course/Module Photography 1: People and Place Assignment number 2: People Unaware

Overall Comments

Thanks Dora for your second submission. You are continuing to work methodically through the course and you have been restructuring your blog, which looks good. However some more signposting would help – if you could include which part of the course each exercise is from that would make it easier to follow. Also your headings across the top are empty when clicked on; these would allow for easy navigation of all your different sections of work.

As before, when you receive this report, you should go through it carefully and make notes about it. Those responses can then go into your learning log.

Please comment on links I have included. If you rework parts of your submission be sure you clearly label the original submission and reworked parts, as well as reflecting on the changes you make, so it is clear for when you eventually submit your work for assessment.

Feedback on assignment

Thank you for sending printed photos, however please be aware that you haven’t included image 9 as a full size print in your portfolio, and that image 10 has a slight stain on the top left, which was already there when I received the prints.

It is really useful to read about your process and the decisions you are making, while producing these photos, both digitally and in the print process. You mention the postproduction in trying to give these images an aged appearance, and your dissatisfaction with the printed black, which I agree with. I wonder if they are actually a little too grainy in places? However it is one of the difficulties of working with digital imagery that the printed versions do not look the same as on screen. It is worth, when trying to achieve a specific ‘look’, to have various small test prints done, to check out the effect you are trying to create. These can always be included in your log as evidence of the process with further reflection on your decision making.

It is good to see you considering the order of your prints and the narrative that they hold. You have discussed making choices and it will be helpful in future to include your contact sheets, to show how you are making that selection, you should annotate them to demonstrate your thought processes. There are many ways to do this, and you can research online or look at other OCA student blogs for inspiration. It is useful to include contact sheets for some of your exercises as well as for your assignment.

The low angle of image 1 really emphasises the power of the horse, but this is one where the black of the image is lost in the postproduction effect.

The connection between the 3 men in image 2 is really interesting, particularly the expression on the middle mans face which keeps me looking between the other 2 men. The detail of their costumes is well captured. Though I wonder if you could have achieved a smaller depth of field her to isolate the 3 figures from the background people.

Image 4 captures the expressions of the children well and their engagement with the festival.

Image 6, though posed, is interesting because of the expression of the child on the edge of the frame, as a contrast to the musicians. The 2 circles in the stones above their heads are quite distracting, I wonder about cropping the image, but possibly this would make the frame too tight above their heads.

Image 9, though I only have the contact image, works well to add more detail to the set, as it contains no faces and the tones also draw our eye to the cross of the tray.

The angle of image 3 makes the man seem slightly unbalanced, and it is a shame you just cut off the mans foot at the bottom of image 8, though this can be difficult when working under pressure. Image 7 has become really washed out showing your concerns about the black, and general tonal range.

Learning Logs or Blogs/Critical essays

Your learning log contains some interesting and varied images as you move through the course. Include contact sheets where possible to show that you are considering selection and also trying to get the right shot each time by reframing or shooting more than once for each image.

Try to critically reflect in more detail about what is successful or not and why for each exercise.

You are clearly doing lots of reading from the bibliography you have submitted with your assignment notes. You need to include some of this on your blog, with comments, notes and reflections about the texts you are reading.

It is excellent to read about the workshop you attended with Patrick Zachmann, these kind of events will improve your confidence and skills.

Also try to get to as many exhibitions as you can and reflect on these. It is useful to think about how the images are framed or laid out in the gallery, as well as the impact scale has on the audience. In thinking about these things it will help you when you are considering the physical and material nature of your own printed images.

Suggested reading/viewing

You might be interested in researching street photography, it is useful to look at Alex Webb – particularly for his creative use of lighting and framing http://www.webbnorriswebb.co/#mi=2&pt=1&pi=10000&s=0&p=1&a=0&at=0

A really useful resource is the foto8 website for photojournalism and photo stories. Here are a couple of examples you might want to look at when thinking about images in series and telling a story. http://www.foto8.com/live/the-neighbours-by-blazej-marczak/ http://www.foto8.com/live/hopes-disappointments-post-revolution-tunisia-tom- szustek/

Here is an interesting article about Steve McCurry and capturing the unguarded moment

http://www.outdoorphotographer.com/how-to/shooting/the-unguarded- moment.html#.U8vTrVboYb0

Pointers for the next assignment

 

  • Include contact sheets
  • Reflect in more depth about the success of what you are trying to achieve in the exercises.
  • Include reflection in your log about the reading you are doing

In your next assignment you will have chance to try out more varied viewpoints as people are less important. It is important to gather strong compositions, before then deciding whether to allow people into your images. Keep pushing yourself to take risks and test out more varied angles and viewpoints which will help you to create some dynamic images. Space and lighting are really important in this next assignment.

Candida Hofer and Thomas Demand photograph interiors of buildings without people, yet in both there is a strong sense of human presence despite its lack

– the images feel as though someone has literally walked out of frame or is about to walk into frame.

See this useful article on Hofer’s work and the atmosphere of absence http://www.americansuburbx.com/2008/11/theory-candida-hfer-atmosphere- of.html

This is an article on Philip Trager’s work on buildings and architecture which will help you think about the feel of a building, before considering the people within it. As despite being an architecture photographer he really considers presence and flow which is that extension of human activity discussed in the course documents.

http://www.nbm.org/about-us/national-building-museum-online/trager- presence-and-flow.html

Tutor name Rachel Smith
Date 22.6.15
Next assignment due 24.8.15
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